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Black Feathers (demo)

RealFaction Author RealFaction

Thanks for front page. Check out another one of my songs from the upcoming album:

First song with the vocals recorded with my new Blue Yeti Pro microphone :) tell me if the volume of the vocals need work or not. This is a song from my upcoming album due sometime in the next couple of months or so.


verse 1

I've seen you fall from such a height,
that time you had no hope for flight.
Caving in to the shadow's depth,
and you kept walking inside death.
The winds were not your friend,
you gave up and met an end,
but I saw no peace in you,
when we met, then I knew


You had a light inside,
trapped by the tide,
I saw your cage without a key,
your heart was filled so empty.
I showed you all you are, you're never alone,
Flying with your feathers just to find a way home,

Verse 2
Reaching for a way to mold,
a better life that isn't cold.
Can you feel my embrace,
can't you see my tattered face?
The ropes keep pulling down,
until we elevate the ground.
Seeking helping hands to guide you,
asking yourself, "what have I come to?"



Rated 5 / 5 stars

Great tune, mang! Your vocals have definitely improved. Still a bit pitchy in spots and a bit out of control here and there...but otherwise some solid shit. You've been working pretty hard on them Great song, mang.


Rated 4 / 5 stars

Pretty heavy piece! I liked the panning stereo effect in the vocals on that first verse. And by the way, nice job on the vocals! Much better than what I could do. Bass is pretty deep and makes itself known, but isn't overpowering the track. All the instruments overall sound pretty legit.

Okay, so one of my biggest problems I feel that this track is suffering from is that pretty much everything aside from the first verse I mentioned is centered in the middle. It sounds like there's a little stereo going on on the higher ends, but it doesn't help the song break out all that much. How much panning have you done with the drums? A little bit actually goes a long way, and I think a lot of people like to gloss over it because they think centering them is good enough.

Also, is that guitar just one layer? It sounds super sick, but I feel like this track could have benefited from another to help widen it out a bit. Maybe panning those backing vocals would help some too, but I wouldn't put that echo effect on them, because I think it might be too much.

Other than that dude, this is pretty dang awesome! I like the lyrical work especially, and I think this could really turn out to be something pretty spectacular once it's tweaked.


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Holy F***! you sound a little bit Corey Taylor... lovely voice, Keep that up and you be big star someday! NO you are star already :)


Rated 4 / 5 stars

I like the song, but I the chorus doesn't do the rest of the song justice. It isn't bad by any means, but when the vocals come in there's a bit too much echo, but I guess that might just be my preference. It's really great to hear your voice on a quality mic, though perhaps increase the vocal volume a bit so that the instruments aren't overpowering your singing quite as often.

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